And am I peculiar in my absolute conviction that commas basically are parentheses, where any nested parentheses (commas inside commas or commas at a sentence edge) get collapsed and disappear?
Here's a student sentence I'm giving feedback on:
Although Desdemona has no thoughts for anyone but her beloved Othello, he mistakes the kindness she naturally bestows on everyone, as a particular fondness for another man, Cassio.In my mind, there are two acceptable revisions of the basic comma error in this sentence:
Although Desdemona had no thoughts for anyone but her beloved Othello, he mistakes the kindness she naturally bestowed on everyone as a particular fondness for another man, Cassio.or
Although Desdemona has no thoughts for anyone but her beloved Othello, he mistakes her kindness, which she naturally bestows on everyone, as a particular fondness for another man, Cassio.But what I'm really seeing in my head is that this:
((Although Desdemona had no thoughts for anyone but her beloved Othello) he mistakes the kindness she naturally bestowed on everyone) as a particular fondness for another man (Cassio))should become this:
((Although Desdemona had no thoughts for anyone but her beloved Othello) he mistakes the kindness (which she naturally bestowed on everyone) as a particular fondness for another man (Cassio))or this:
((Although Desdemona had no thoughts for anyone but her beloved Othello) he mistakes the kindness she naturally bestowed on everyone as a particular fondness for another man (Cassio))Of course, as with lisp, this would be much clearer with a little indentation
Is it just experience with lisp that makes me think this way, or does this go on in everyone's head?(
(Although Desdemona had no thoughts for anyone but her beloved Othello)
he mistakes the kindness
(which she naturally bestowed on everyone)
as a particular fondness for another man
(Cassio)
)
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